My Second Multi-Draft

I thought I did somewhat well on my first multi-draft. I also thought that I was gonna get a bad grade on it but i actually did pretty will on it. Reading the comments on my first multi draft, I realized that I have to work on my transitions. Reading the essay over, i noticed that it didn't flow to well towards the end. I also need to be a bit more specific and build up my argument a bit better. I also realized that i make the essay drag on and it starts to go off topic. Basically in my second multi draft, I need to proofread, work on my transitions, and make sure i stay on topic and build up my argument better.